Uriel M. Raven

Hello there, Krow here, I will be reviewing your Character application today.
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BUMP once all of the changes have been made.

Uriel wrote:

Uriel Monet Raven

N/A	(presumed) 21 (actual) Unknown	04-01
Human	D	Rusty Hearts

F (Please write this out as female, just kind of a pet peeve.)

Species Ability/Perk

N/A

Special Unique Characteristics

N/A

Character Depth

PERSONALITY
Uriel is a quiet and near-emotionless young woman, best shown in her first appearance, where she does not say a word or react to anything until she is issued orders to kill. Her quietness is not due to a lack of self-confidence however; it is because she does not fear anything; aside from her nightmares and that person. She has a "no-nonsense" attitude, and follows through with any order that the guild sets for her with unexpected determination, putting said order before anything else. Uriel always remains bitter and apathetic towards other people, even though she is deeply traumatized, vulnerable, and rather sensitive, afraid and concerned about how other people might react to her horrific past.

This is best shown when several people attempt to get her to open up to them to no avail, with her merely brushing them off wordlessly. She is also extremely calm, even in battle, and is very seldom surprised by even the most drastic of actions. Uriel generally acts indifferent, bordering on arrogance, to most situations that she is faced with as seen from how she rarely views her opponent worth her time. Despite this trait, Uriel is a very perceptive young woman and is fully aware of the limits of her abilities and usually anything she states in comparison to an opponent is justified.

Whenever a male touches her, even by accident, or if a man makes unneeded passes at her, she will go berserk and strike them violently. She dislikes the fact that she treats people the way she does, and longs to get over what happened to her two hundred years ago. This is best shown in her dreams, where after brushing off several people with her usual icy silence, stating that she hates them, she whispers "But I really hate myself." Uriel has a great dislike of being mocked, and it is being insulted that makes her iciness shatter, giving rise to a cold fury.

All this combined serves to fuel Uriel's large disregard of and hatred towards the concept of fate. She displays a similar, though more mellow, disregard of God, simply shrugging it off as a dark joke compared to her heated response to fate. Uriel has a very tactical personality, when she is not enraged she will study her opponent thoroughly if given the opportunity. She has become a brilliant fighter because of this and on-top of her normal survival instincts, this advantage of her brain allows her to survive some of the most difficult battles. She is prone to using decoys and tricks to defeat her larger enemies, on-top of evasive maneuvers and hiding while looking for a weak spot.

In the face of adversity, Uriel has the uncommon ability to shun all emotions and shine a blank slate, thinking three to four steps ahead to clutch the pinch and seize control of the situation. Coupled with her vast intelligence, her detached emotional state is perhaps her greatest asset. Utilizing this ability, Uriel was able to endure her trauma through that event, and only enters such a state when truly enraged. Uriel has a habit of keeping a straight face whenever faced with a comical situation, as well as drooling when she sleeps. In addition, she is illiterate, and due to this, Uriel is a horrible cook, despite whatever she cooks always appears beautiful.

LIKES

• Rusty Hearts (Likes her guild leader and the members within it)
  
• Ice Cream (Her favorite desert) dessert has two s's.
  
• Magic (The most fascinating thing to ever witness, various types of magic)
  

DISLIKES

• Wasted Time (Hates to have her time wasted)
  
• Men (Due to an emotional event when she was younger)
  
• Racism (She dislikes anyone that hastes others that don't possess magic and vice versa)
  

FEARS

• Getting raped (Due to an emotional event when she was younger)
  
• Dragons (Who wouldn't be scared of a gigantic creature of destruction)
  
• Her Past (Scared of what people might think of her regarding her past)
  

MOTIVATIONS/GOALS

• Take part in a 10 year and 100 year quest
  
• Become an SS-class mage one day
  
• Rewrite her past so she can once and for all free herself from it
  

Appearance

Hair: Pink
Eyes: Pink
Skin Tone: White
Height: 5'5"
Weight: 120 lbs.

Other

Guild: Rusty Hearts
Guild Tattoo: right thigh

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Hey there, my name's Selenia and I'll be grading your app today!

Can you explain why Uriel can't cook because she's illiterate in your personality? I guess it just doesn't make any sense to me. You don't necessarily need to be literate to cook. That's only if you follow instructions. However, you can be a good cook if you're taught. However, if she's just a bad cook in general, that's fine, but you said it's because of her illiteracy so I was confused.

Please add a color to her guild mark.

Thanks! Make these edits and then bump to let me know.

Bump - Edit made to guild removed the other thing that confused you, but for future reference so you aren't confused.

Illiterate Showing or marked by a lack of acquaintance with the fundamentals of a particular field of knowledge in this case cooking.

Ah sorry, I went with the meaning of illiteracy as in reading or writing, I apologize.

Also, one last thing, please change her allegiance. The allegiances are Lawful, Neutral, and Chaotic either Good, Neutral, or Evil, thanks!

Fixed

Approved!