[NPC] Jack Daniel

Not particularly in the mood to add fancy words and conjoining concepts as to what I think of this app; I'm just going to point out what needs fixing in minimalist fashion.

NICKNAME

If you do not have one, just put "N/A" or something that signifies a lack thereof. Looks confusing and/or incomplete otherwise.

AGE

It's missing.

SS

Not sure whether or not you can put any rank above "D" in an app at the moment; I recall discussion over it. Setting aside the fact that this is a test and that NPC does not really "exist", by the time you fix what I've addressed thus far I should already have a definite answer on this bit.

Jack can fly really high.

Too vague. Add parametres such as height, duration, speed, what allows you to fly if there are any physical or magical reasons to flight.

Jack can read the minds of the people around him within a 20 metre radius.

GG, that's not going to fly in accordance with article 14, section 12, paragraph 11 sub-section 2, line 7: Godmod/Metagaming is not permitted. Overall, if there was some more description on this mind reading and some limitations and any other parametres, there's some chance that mind-reading can be let through, just not as is. The twenty metres isn't a big issue so much as it is reading another person's mind, thus knowing what actions they're going to take and possibly subsequent manipulation of their future actions; as with most abilities, the most pressing concern is the overwhelming effect it has on combat. Delve more into it to limit how powerful this ability can potentially be, or outright remove it.

Jack is hot.

Mmm, this is purely subjective but doesn't actually have any bearings on anything besides self-observation via narration, or observation from another character that agrees with this notion. Nothing particularly wrong, but forcing other characters to perceive Jack as "hot" won't fly.

PERSONALITY

3hunna fitty is the minimum personality size. That being said, add more for this section to be passable.

LIKES/DISLIKES/FEARS/MOTIVATIONS

I mean, nothing has been described to garner some of these issues including fearing himself, Animus Sins or Behemoth's guild leader, though it's neither that anything is outright wrong with some of these bits. There is an issue with one of your dislikes and likes, that being Jack's status as a womanizer and his motivation to create a harem, while he also dislikes overly flirtatious women. At the moment it's confusing, but if you specify a bit the two won't sound as contradictory. As a matter of fact, all these bits can use a bit more clarification as to why all these sorts of dispositions exist.

APPEARANCE

Feel free to also clarify on, like, almost all of this; however, all that actually outright requires fixing for a minimal "pass" is to more clearly state your Hair, Eyes, and Skin Tone instead of simply referring to your profile picture.